Which is better in DMing prospects long dm or short one? And what do you think is the best opener for dms?

Hey everyone. Hey Jonny, I just attempted my first in-feed VSL and would appreciate some critique to be sure I'm heading in right direction. Thanks! More importantly, I'm curious to hear if it would pass compliance: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1F9zmBQ77_A5ajCm067MEWxma38rnXrYh4uYpo4CcpGo/edit?usp=drivesdk

Thank you for such an amazing library of so much value!

I wanna link a sales page that I wrote and I would like to have some comments on that but, as mentioned in the video (that admin says to watch) so it only tells about a "how to get a critique on email" not on sales page so, I'm confused in how to post a sales page for critique? However, here's the page I wrote https://docs.google.com/document/d/1CV2dK8mG3kG4kNmOCOjhHQViYtA77QSgRmwjFX5CFcA/edit?usp=sharing

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