- I like the preview slightly better than the SL, Simply because of the very subtle "first step" symbol within it. It's an interesting curiosity SL, but I wonder if it wouldn't generate any automatic association with the reader. Worth testing for sure. - I like the first line. But "before you throw a punch you must read this book" I'd follow that with a validator, because it sounds a little weird. Like why would you read a book to throw a punch? Not to me, I get it, but for the audience. So what you do in that situation is you validate it, or call it out yourself, just say "Trust me, I get it, this sounds strange, stick with me just a second" and then use proof or credibility of some kind. Just a minor tweak but could make a big difference. - Well sir, you got me. I typed all that without reading ahead. Good job. lmao. - So yeah, what you've got seems to be all about convincing the reader that they need to read before they start, so the key credibility points/persuasion points are down there in the bullet points, the need for technique and strategy in training. I'd actually skip the middle section and jump straight to showing the reader those bullet points. Then introduce the guide. Develop the need for technique and strategy in training, then offer that solution. There should be something that they experience that confronts them emotionally in regard to lack of technique or strategy, I'd guess it was something like "why do my punches look like shit and don't deliver any force?", "How do I hit clean like Paquiao or Garcia?", "How tf does Lomachenko move like Neo in the Matrix?" stuff like that. Developing a clear image of the problem. - Otherwise great work!

Great let's take a look! - Unless you get every single student to $50k/mo within 7 days, you're looking at compliance issues. Technically an illegal claim. Again, unless it's actually true. But I've never seen something like that before. - Face/voice issues, Not sure who the speaker is, even though you're jumping straight into first person perspective. There's a need for credibility and authority. - Lots of writing issues. It's easier than ever to fix grammatical and punctuation issues with GPT, just run it through that before launching! - There's also not much awareness or sophistication consideration. You're jumping straight into "I tried this and was amazed," but we don't know who the authority is, what's special about it, what makes it different from every other course out there. Great start! Keep moving forward!

@Myra Janine De Vera oh gotcha! Haha well Great! As long as you can fulfill that promise.

@Raph Raph Interested to hear what makes it "REAL" in comparison with whats freely available, and searchable, right here? Whats included in your daily emails that helps newcomers beyond whats in The First Client Mini-course? https://www.skool.com/convertnow/classroom/4c38a51c?md=cf2433665a9b444c9479d207b8718a21

Teaching moment: This is the wrong question ^ 🫶 A better question: Based on what I know about my offer, my audience, the world, and myself, what conversational entry point is most likely to peak interest and elicit a favorable response? Why? Because our goal is sales (which requires a good conversation), we need to OVERCOME ad-blindness (the jadedness from the hundreds of spam DMs they get), and what we're doing is reaching out to a stranger (they don't know us, so it's a first impression). We're solving for multiple variables at once—Not getting ignored is the most crucial step. Reaching out in a way nobody has ever reached out before gives you the best chance to get past the open. But how do you do that? So then, to find the answer, we need to investigate the offer and the audience. What is the core problem they have that the offer solves? Why would they want that solution over others? What have they heard about this solution in the past that might turn them away from or towards your offer? And, quite importantly, are you saying all of this in a way that feels new and authentic? Long or short doesn't matter if every word is interesting and relevant to them. However! You did ask "What is the best opener?" And that's a better question, because the way you open determines everything else. I can't help much more without knowing more about the product, the problem you're solving, and people you want to serve.

@Asim Khalid okay so you offer funnels, email marketing and copywriting to fitness trainers, basically? You then your DMs need to start with some competitive point. I imagine that's a somewhat saturated niche, so you'd wanna hit a conversation point that nobody else is hitting to stand out. Very basically. It'll be all about Sophistication, proof, and relevance. Is it a serious need, are they looking for it, and how do you prove you're the best option.