"Thanks so much, Tre! 🙌 It means a lot coming from you. This technique has always intrigued me, and your feedback just solidifies my confidence in experimenting with bold, storytelling-driven styles. If there’s any specific aspect you think I could refine further, I’d love to hear your thoughts! Always eager to learn and grow."

- [Bro take it as a constructive criticism cuz the Following are no-bs advices] - Clarity Issues: The message can get lost in the playful tone, and some sentences feel messy or over-the-top (e.g., “as if you were bulking then cutting for 8+ months”). - Overuse of Humor: While humor works, too much of it may dilute the impact. Certain phrases like “Moto Moto from the zoo movie” could alienate readers who don’t get the reference. - Missing Proof and Authority: There's no mention of why the author is qualified to introduce "Dualfiting." Credibility-building elements (testimonials, expertise) are absent. - Weak CTA: "Start here by checking it here" is vague and uninspiring. It doesn’t create urgency or clarify what the audience is clicking - [You got this bro with little more practice you'll nail it, Rooting for you {ik iman gadzhi stolen}]

@Linas Jakubauskas Yaa bro, my advice stays the same. This will take some time since Nico’s new to this format, but here’s my suggestion: 👉 Watch Tom Stoic’s videos and study how he speaks. Practice mimicking his tone in front of a mirror. With consistency, you’ll nail it in no time! 💪 Also, bro, I’m planning to drop my own Upwork video by the end of this week. Would love to hear your suggestions or get some constructive criticism from you when it’s ready! Let’s crush it together!

I have drafted a killer version for you in the doc........

Hey David, I just read your copy, and honestly, it's already great! The structure is solid, and the problem-solution flow is super engaging. That said, I think you could take it up a notch by adding a storytelling layer to make it even more persuasive. Specifically: - Frame it from Carl’s personal perspective—show that he was once in the same boat as the target audience. - Share a specific incident from Carl’s life when he struggled with his own dating profile and how it made him feel. - Then, detail how he turned it around, using the exact system he’s now offering through Lovelift. Here’s why this works: When readers see that Carl has personally overcome the same challenges they’re facing, it builds trust and makes the solution feel more achievable. Stories like this also make the pitch feel relatable and human, rather than just another offer. For example: Instead of saying, "I’ll teach you the exact way to get more matches," you could write something like: "Back in 2016, I was struggling on dating apps just like you. I spent hours tweaking my bio, picking what I thought were the best pictures, and still—nothing. It wasn’t until [insert turning point or discovery] that I realized what I was doing wrong… and everything changed." Adding this personal touch will hook the reader emotionally before diving into the solution. What do you think? I’d love to hear your thoughts and see the updated version! Cheers, Dheeraj

Looking forward to see that persuasion from you bro...