What do you guys think? What could I improve? All feedback welcome!

Hold nothing back. Any and all feedback is welcome ❤️

Hey everyone, I’m working on a hook for my VSL script for my paid online community, Game University+, and I could use some feedback to make it even more compelling. Here’s the current draft—let me know what you think or how it could hit harder: "𝐋𝐞𝐭 𝐦𝐞 𝐚𝐬𝐤 𝐲𝐨𝐮 𝐚 𝐪𝐮𝐞𝐬𝐭𝐢𝐨𝐧. 𝐃𝐨𝐞𝐬 𝐝𝐚𝐭𝐢𝐧𝐠 𝐟𝐞𝐞𝐥 𝐥𝐢𝐤𝐞 𝐚 𝐜𝐨𝐧𝐬𝐭𝐚𝐧𝐭 𝐛𝐚𝐭𝐭𝐥𝐞—𝐟𝐢𝐥𝐥𝐞𝐝 𝐰𝐢𝐭𝐡 𝐫𝐞𝐣𝐞𝐜𝐭𝐢𝐨𝐧, 𝐜𝐨𝐧𝐟𝐮𝐬𝐢𝐨𝐧, 𝐚𝐧𝐝 𝐧𝐢𝐠𝐡𝐭𝐬 𝐰𝐨𝐧𝐝𝐞𝐫𝐢𝐧𝐠 𝐢𝐟 𝐲𝐨𝐮’𝐥𝐥 𝐞𝐯𝐞𝐫 𝐟𝐢𝐧𝐝 𝐭𝐡𝐚𝐭 𝐬𝐩𝐞𝐜𝐢𝐚𝐥 𝐬𝐨𝐦𝐞𝐨𝐧𝐞? 𝐃𝐨 𝐲𝐨𝐮 𝐝𝐫𝐞𝐚𝐦 𝐨𝐟 𝐜𝐨𝐧𝐟𝐢𝐝𝐞𝐧𝐭𝐥𝐲 𝐦𝐞𝐞𝐭𝐢𝐧𝐠 𝐛𝐞𝐚𝐮𝐭𝐢𝐟𝐮𝐥 𝐰𝐨𝐦𝐞𝐧 𝐚𝐧𝐝 𝐛𝐮𝐢𝐥𝐝𝐢𝐧𝐠 𝐚 𝐟𝐮𝐥𝐟𝐢𝐥𝐥𝐢𝐧𝐠 𝐫𝐞𝐥𝐚𝐭𝐢𝐨𝐧𝐬𝐡𝐢𝐩 𝐰𝐢𝐭𝐡 𝐚 𝐥𝐨𝐯𝐢𝐧𝐠, 𝐬𝐮𝐩𝐩𝐨𝐫𝐭𝐢𝐯𝐞, 𝐚𝐧𝐝 𝐟𝐞𝐦𝐢𝐧𝐢𝐧𝐞 𝐠𝐢𝐫𝐥𝐟𝐫𝐢𝐞𝐧𝐝? 𝐓𝐡𝐚𝐭’𝐬 𝐞𝐱𝐚𝐜𝐭𝐥𝐲 𝐰𝐡𝐚𝐭 𝐡𝐚𝐩𝐩𝐞𝐧𝐞𝐝 𝐟𝐨𝐫 𝐀𝐥𝐛𝐞𝐫𝐭. 𝐀𝐟𝐭𝐞𝐫 𝐣𝐨𝐢𝐧𝐢𝐧𝐠 𝐆𝐚𝐦𝐞 𝐔𝐧𝐢𝐯𝐞𝐫𝐬𝐢𝐭𝐲+, 𝐡𝐞 𝐨𝐯𝐞𝐫𝐜𝐚𝐦𝐞 𝐡𝐢𝐬 𝐟𝐞𝐚𝐫𝐬, 𝐥𝐚𝐧𝐝𝐞𝐝 𝐚 𝐝𝐚𝐭𝐞 𝐰𝐢𝐭𝐡 𝐚 𝐰𝐨𝐦𝐚𝐧 𝐡𝐞 𝐨𝐧𝐜𝐞 𝐭𝐡𝐨𝐮𝐠𝐡𝐭 𝐰𝐚𝐬 𝐨𝐮𝐭 𝐨𝐟 𝐡𝐢𝐬 𝐥𝐞𝐚𝐠𝐮𝐞, 𝐚𝐧𝐝 𝐬𝐭𝐚𝐫𝐭𝐞𝐝 𝐬𝐞𝐞𝐢𝐧𝐠 𝐝𝐚𝐭𝐢𝐧𝐠 𝐢𝐧 𝐚 𝐰𝐡𝐨𝐥𝐞 𝐧𝐞𝐰 𝐥𝐢𝐠𝐡𝐭. 𝐋𝐞𝐭 𝐦𝐞 𝐣𝐮𝐬𝐭 𝐬𝐚𝐲 𝐲𝐨𝐮’𝐫𝐞 𝐧𝐨𝐭 𝐚𝐥𝐨𝐧𝐞, 𝐚𝐧𝐝 𝐰𝐢𝐭𝐡 𝐆𝐚𝐦𝐞 𝐔𝐧𝐢𝐯𝐞𝐫𝐬𝐢𝐭𝐲+, 𝐲𝐨𝐮’𝐫𝐞 𝐞𝐱𝐚𝐜𝐭𝐥𝐲 𝐰𝐡𝐞𝐫𝐞 𝐲𝐨𝐮 𝐧𝐞𝐞𝐝 𝐭𝐨 𝐛𝐞 𝐭𝐨 𝐭𝐫𝐚𝐧𝐬𝐟𝐨𝐫𝐦 𝐲𝐨𝐮𝐫 𝐝𝐚𝐭𝐢𝐧𝐠 𝐥𝐢𝐟𝐞 𝐚𝐧𝐝 𝐦𝐞𝐞𝐭 𝐭𝐡𝐚𝐭 𝐝𝐫𝐞𝐚𝐦 𝐠𝐢𝐫𝐥." - Thanks in advance for your insights! 🫡

Noticed in Alex Hormozi's new Skool Games VSL he doesn't use any value stacks. Any ideas as to why he does this? I'm debating whether to add a value stack section to my VSL script. What do you guys think (see my script below)? "On top of that, each concept is broken down into simple and logical terms that anyone can understand and apply. When you click the yellow button below and join, you’ll get instant access to: - The Dating Masterclass: Learn everything about dating—from texting and dating apps to planning unforgettable dates. - The Girlfriend Blueprint: Transition from dating to a relationship effortlessly, with zero confusion or frustration. - 1-on-1 VIP Call with Skyler: Tackle your unique challenges with personalized advice and a custom action plan. - Daily Q&A and Accountability Calls: Get real-time feedback and support whenever you need it. I’m in your corner every step of the way—cheering you on, helping you overcome challenges, and guiding you to find the dream girl you’ve always wanted. You’re getting over $1,585 worth of value. But here’s the best part, it’s not going to cost you $1500 dollars. I’m providing all this value for only $14 / month. That’s less than the price of a few coffees."

(𝗦𝗰𝗿𝗶𝗽𝘁 𝗯𝗲𝗹𝗼𝘄 👇) 𝗥𝗲𝗰𝗲𝗻𝘁𝗹𝘆 𝘄𝗿𝗼𝘁𝗲 𝘁𝗵𝗶𝘀 𝗩𝗦𝗟 𝘀𝗰𝗿𝗶𝗽𝘁 𝗳𝗼𝗿 𝗺𝘆 𝗳𝗿𝗲𝗲 𝗰𝗼𝗺𝗺𝘂𝗻𝗶𝘁𝘆 "𝗚𝗮𝗺𝗲 𝗨𝗻𝗶𝘃𝗲𝗿𝘀𝗶𝘁𝘆 (𝗙𝗿𝗲𝗲)." 𝗪𝗵𝗮𝘁 𝗱𝗼 𝘆𝗼𝘂 𝗴𝘂𝘆𝘀 𝘁𝗵𝗶𝗻𝗸? 𝗔𝗻𝘆𝘁𝗵𝗶𝗻𝗴 𝘁𝗵𝗮𝘁 𝗰𝗼𝘂𝗹𝗱 𝗯𝗲 𝗶𝗺𝗽𝗿𝗼𝘃𝗲𝗱 𝗼𝗿 𝘄𝗼𝗿𝗱𝗲𝗱 𝗯𝗲𝘁𝘁𝗲𝗿? 𝗧𝗵𝗮𝗻𝗸𝘀! 𝗦𝗰𝗿𝗶𝗽𝘁: "Do you ever see a beautiful girl walk by and wish you had the confidence to go up and talk to her? Or maybe you feel frustrated with dating apps and want to authentically meet women in person? Orrrrr maybe you just want to improve your ability to talk to women in social settings? Now, what if I said you could learn to confidently walk up to any girl, start a conversation, and get her phone number. How would that feel? Believe me, I know exactly how it feels to struggle with confidence, talking to girls, and navigating cold approaches. But today, things are different. I was able to overcome those struggles, meet girls, and go on successful dates. And I've helped hundreds of guys, just like you, build the skills and confidence to approach women and get real results in their dating lives. But it wasn’t always like this. A few years ago, I was shy, introverted, and terrified of talking to strangers. The idea of a cold approach seemed absolutely impossible. But one day, I hit a low point where I was just tired of feeling powerless. And from that point forward, I decided I was gonna go all in on improving my ability to talk to women I started learning everything I could about talking to girls, cold approaching, and human psychology. I watched courses, I read books, and I studied from lots and lots of different sources. Then I started cold approaching women in real life. Let’s be honest—it was not easy. I got rejected many, many, many times. But with every conversation, I got better. I learned what worked and what didn’t. And after months of practice, I was able to confidently walk up to women, start a conversation, and get her contact info—whether it was at the gym, the mall, or even just walking down the street. The best part? I was meeting high-quality women who I actually wanted to date. I was actually excited to go on a date with them. No more surprises like with dating apps. I was going on real dates with women I was genuinely excited to meet.