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๐Ÿ›Ÿ VSL Hook Help? ๐Ÿ†˜
Hey everyone, Iโ€™m working on a hook for my VSL script for my paid online community, Game University+, and I could use some feedback to make it even more compelling.
Hereโ€™s the current draftโ€”let me know what you think or how it could hit harder:
"๐‹๐ž๐ญ ๐ฆ๐ž ๐š๐ฌ๐ค ๐ฒ๐จ๐ฎ ๐š ๐ช๐ฎ๐ž๐ฌ๐ญ๐ข๐จ๐ง.
๐ƒ๐จ๐ž๐ฌ ๐๐š๐ญ๐ข๐ง๐  ๐Ÿ๐ž๐ž๐ฅ ๐ฅ๐ข๐ค๐ž ๐š ๐œ๐จ๐ง๐ฌ๐ญ๐š๐ง๐ญ ๐›๐š๐ญ๐ญ๐ฅ๐žโ€”๐Ÿ๐ข๐ฅ๐ฅ๐ž๐ ๐ฐ๐ข๐ญ๐ก ๐ซ๐ž๐ฃ๐ž๐œ๐ญ๐ข๐จ๐ง, ๐œ๐จ๐ง๐Ÿ๐ฎ๐ฌ๐ข๐จ๐ง, ๐š๐ง๐ ๐ง๐ข๐ ๐ก๐ญ๐ฌ ๐ฐ๐จ๐ง๐๐ž๐ซ๐ข๐ง๐  ๐ข๐Ÿ ๐ฒ๐จ๐ฎโ€™๐ฅ๐ฅ ๐ž๐ฏ๐ž๐ซ ๐Ÿ๐ข๐ง๐ ๐ญ๐ก๐š๐ญ ๐ฌ๐ฉ๐ž๐œ๐ข๐š๐ฅ ๐ฌ๐จ๐ฆ๐ž๐จ๐ง๐ž?
๐ƒ๐จ ๐ฒ๐จ๐ฎ ๐๐ซ๐ž๐š๐ฆ ๐จ๐Ÿ ๐œ๐จ๐ง๐Ÿ๐ข๐๐ž๐ง๐ญ๐ฅ๐ฒ ๐ฆ๐ž๐ž๐ญ๐ข๐ง๐  ๐›๐ž๐š๐ฎ๐ญ๐ข๐Ÿ๐ฎ๐ฅ ๐ฐ๐จ๐ฆ๐ž๐ง ๐š๐ง๐ ๐›๐ฎ๐ข๐ฅ๐๐ข๐ง๐  ๐š ๐Ÿ๐ฎ๐ฅ๐Ÿ๐ข๐ฅ๐ฅ๐ข๐ง๐  ๐ซ๐ž๐ฅ๐š๐ญ๐ข๐จ๐ง๐ฌ๐ก๐ข๐ฉ ๐ฐ๐ข๐ญ๐ก ๐š ๐ฅ๐จ๐ฏ๐ข๐ง๐ , ๐ฌ๐ฎ๐ฉ๐ฉ๐จ๐ซ๐ญ๐ข๐ฏ๐ž, ๐š๐ง๐ ๐Ÿ๐ž๐ฆ๐ข๐ง๐ข๐ง๐ž ๐ ๐ข๐ซ๐ฅ๐Ÿ๐ซ๐ข๐ž๐ง๐?
๐“๐ก๐š๐ญโ€™๐ฌ ๐ž๐ฑ๐š๐œ๐ญ๐ฅ๐ฒ ๐ฐ๐ก๐š๐ญ ๐ก๐š๐ฉ๐ฉ๐ž๐ง๐ž๐ ๐Ÿ๐จ๐ซ ๐€๐ฅ๐›๐ž๐ซ๐ญ. ๐€๐Ÿ๐ญ๐ž๐ซ ๐ฃ๐จ๐ข๐ง๐ข๐ง๐  ๐†๐š๐ฆ๐ž ๐”๐ง๐ข๐ฏ๐ž๐ซ๐ฌ๐ข๐ญ๐ฒ+, ๐ก๐ž ๐จ๐ฏ๐ž๐ซ๐œ๐š๐ฆ๐ž ๐ก๐ข๐ฌ ๐Ÿ๐ž๐š๐ซ๐ฌ, ๐ฅ๐š๐ง๐๐ž๐ ๐š ๐๐š๐ญ๐ž ๐ฐ๐ข๐ญ๐ก ๐š ๐ฐ๐จ๐ฆ๐š๐ง ๐ก๐ž ๐จ๐ง๐œ๐ž ๐ญ๐ก๐จ๐ฎ๐ ๐ก๐ญ ๐ฐ๐š๐ฌ ๐จ๐ฎ๐ญ ๐จ๐Ÿ ๐ก๐ข๐ฌ ๐ฅ๐ž๐š๐ ๐ฎ๐ž, ๐š๐ง๐ ๐ฌ๐ญ๐š๐ซ๐ญ๐ž๐ ๐ฌ๐ž๐ž๐ข๐ง๐  ๐๐š๐ญ๐ข๐ง๐  ๐ข๐ง ๐š ๐ฐ๐ก๐จ๐ฅ๐ž ๐ง๐ž๐ฐ ๐ฅ๐ข๐ ๐ก๐ญ.
๐‹๐ž๐ญ ๐ฆ๐ž ๐ฃ๐ฎ๐ฌ๐ญ ๐ฌ๐š๐ฒ ๐ฒ๐จ๐ฎโ€™๐ซ๐ž ๐ง๐จ๐ญ ๐š๐ฅ๐จ๐ง๐ž, ๐š๐ง๐ ๐ฐ๐ข๐ญ๐ก ๐†๐š๐ฆ๐ž ๐”๐ง๐ข๐ฏ๐ž๐ซ๐ฌ๐ข๐ญ๐ฒ+, ๐ฒ๐จ๐ฎโ€™๐ซ๐ž ๐ž๐ฑ๐š๐œ๐ญ๐ฅ๐ฒ ๐ฐ๐ก๐ž๐ซ๐ž ๐ฒ๐จ๐ฎ ๐ง๐ž๐ž๐ ๐ญ๐จ ๐›๐ž ๐ญ๐จ ๐ญ๐ซ๐š๐ง๐ฌ๐Ÿ๐จ๐ซ๐ฆ ๐ฒ๐จ๐ฎ๐ซ ๐๐š๐ญ๐ข๐ง๐  ๐ฅ๐ข๐Ÿ๐ž ๐š๐ง๐ ๐ฆ๐ž๐ž๐ญ ๐ญ๐ก๐š๐ญ ๐๐ซ๐ž๐š๐ฆ ๐ ๐ข๐ซ๐ฅ."
- Thanks in advance for your insights! ๐Ÿซก
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