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@Sonia Ramzan I can't access the copy. It says "File is in owner's trash".

@Loïc Longangué Hey, it's view only, I can't comment. If you fix it I'll break it down in the doc. That said, here's my review of what I saw: 1. You should pick a real product, not imagine one when writing practice copy. 2. Capitalize the first letter in a sentence and don't forget punctuation. 3. Properly follow a copy structure (PAS, HSO, CJN, ...). 4. Improve the flow of the copy - you wrote PAS it seems, but the transition from 'Problem' to 'Agitation' is not good. The transition from 'Agitation' to 'Solution' is smoother. I like the way you position the product as something NEW you discovered, and now you're trying to help people in a position you once were and that you showed your friends and it helped them too. 5. The transition to CTA is not smooth at all. You're talking about how it helped a lots of people and suddenly BOOM a CTA. This will kill your conversion rate. 6. Make sure you have one goal & one angle in every piece of copy. Your next steps: 1. Watch the FREE 8-hour copywriting course and some of Tyson's writing emails videos. This way you'll understand the fundamentals of copywriting and what a good copy should entail. 2. Read a loads of copy from the 4D swipe file for example. 3. Write 5-10 emails and submit them for review. Based on the reviews, improve the same copies and submit them again. Remember to use a format (PAS, etc.) and use a template for the format you pick (Here on Skool, go to 'Classroom', then '3. 4D Tools, Templates & Resources' then '4D Email Copywriting Templates').

No, don't decline it.

Yo, I'l review it properly later with comments and everything but from the first look, it's actually not that bad. Try to sound a bit more human, make transitions between the lines smoother and read a loads of great copy (you can find it in the 4D swipe file).