i see you used a problem-solution lead, so in this case i think you should warm the reader up more by digging the knife deeper, and then presenting your solution as the ONLY way they can escape this horrible faith that is going to college and getting a shit job.

read these books (in the order): scientific advertising (quite hard to read, if you're not a native speaker) cashvertising great leads the boron letters copywriting secrets the adweek copywriting handbook write at least 1 piece of copy everyday (emails and captions are the best to practice, since they are applicable to every other type of copy) rewrite and study good pieces of copy written by your favorite copywriters. once you're at least decent at writing emails and captions, start outreaching. (you can do low-value and high-volume outreach, or high-value and low volume. personally i found the second option to be more effective) the determining factor to land clients is to be different from the crowd and delivering something so high-value they can't ignore you.

@Kyaw Win ty g, that sounds great. the only problem is that the influencer is from brazil (which is where i'm from), so the video is in portuguese, so i have no any idea on how i can use it on prospects from english-speaking countries.