........LinkedIn Profile Spruce Up......

So, in an effort to redo my LinkedIn Business Page Bios and look more Professional, i paid (A very small amount, as it was on a "Promotional deal!) to have my Copy Writing re written.

It's a little shambolic if you ask me, and it's something that i could of done better, if i had the Time and Forethought to do this.

And there in lays the problem, because i really don't know where to begin, or have the time to do this, I paid someone else to do a "Hash Job, and this is me being Polite about it.

So, have a look and tell me what you think

#connorbenham #Copywriting the EBG Way (P1)

Welcome to Severn Gorge Arboriculture Commercial, where greenery meets professionalism in a tailored package designed exclusively for our esteemed commercial clients! At Severn Gorge Arboriculture Commercial, we're not just about Garden Maintenance and Tree/Hedge Care- we're your trusted partners in cultivating thriving outdoor spaces that leave a lasting impression. Our journey began with a dedication to serving the needs of our valued commercial clientele, providing a comprehensive range of services tailored to elevate your outdoor environments to new heights. In addition to our stellar offerings in Hedge Care and Garden Maintenance, we bring a wealth of expertise to the table, including Tree Consultancy, Arb Reports/Surveys, Woodland Surveys/Reports, and Woodland Management/Creation. Our specialised services extend to Orchard Surveys/Reports, Orchard Management/Creation, and meticulous Fruit Tree Care to ensure your orchards flourish. But that's not all- our team of seasoned professionals is well-versed in General Tree Care, ensuring the health and vitality of every tree under our watchful eye. And when it comes to the more daring endeavors, like Tree Felling and Planting, you can trust us to handle it with precision and care. With Severn Gorge Arboriculture Commercial, you're not just getting a service- you're getting a commitment to excellence, reliability, and unparalleled expertise in all things green. Let's collaborate to transform your outdoor spaces into thriving havens of natural beauty and tranquility. Reach out to us today and let's embark on this green journey together!

And here is the one for my other Business Severn Gorge Horticulture, which will need to be re written again, as i have now changed this business to Severn Gorge Environmental.

Introducing Severn Gorge Horticulture Ltd- your ultimate go-to for Garden Maintenance and Tree/Hedge Care, with a delightful twist of Fruit Tree and Shrub/Bush Pruning thrown into the mix! Born in the verdant days of May 2021, our roots stem from the overwhelming demand for top-notch Gardening Services from our beloved Domestic Customers. While our heart lies in serving the cozy nooks of home gardens, we're not shy to spread our green fingers to embrace Commercial Clients and sprawling Large Gardens/Country Estates, they're our kind of specialty! At Severn Gorge Horticulture, our service scope isn't just confined to Hedge Care and Garden Maintenance. Nope, we're all about elevating your green space game with Small Tree Care, Hedge/Tree Planting, and even the daring ventures of Removal's and Reduction's. Got a jungle instead of a garden? Trees and hedges running amok? Fear not, friend! Whether your garden's a mini-Eden or a sprawling estate, we've got you covered. Let's tame those unruly greens together! Don't hesitate to reach out- the wilder, the better!

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