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Overall good copy! few edits. Keep up the great work and dont forget to like! 🔥💪
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thanks man will keep practicing any new one soon, will send for a review again.
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WOW!!! This copy is great! kept me engaged all the way, only a few small tweaks and this email is worth hundreds! Keep up the great work 🔥💰
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Made a B2B story email, want to put this on my portfolio. Give me everything you got💯
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I’m not the owner of the post but it’s pretty good
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wrote notes, first part of copy was Great! I would change and rewrite the second half. Hope this helps and don't forget to like! 🔥
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Made edits. The copy in this email is pretty good! the second half of the email needed very little edits and was engaging.
the first part of the email needs more emotion in it. it feels like it went from your frustrated to heres how I can help. I made edits to show what I mean.
but overall good stuff! keep up the good work! 6.5/10
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can I use it for portfolio/outreach?
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hey guys ckeck it out and let me know what do you think appreciate u
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Made some comments Tina, Seesdeep did most of the work.
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Have you ever done the bait and switch perfectly for you client that result in success, i would like to learn more about how you do it, perhap maybe I will DM you for it, I just wanna know first Thanks
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Do you mean from a clickbait standpoint for emails? A sales standpoint for booking a sales call? If you can clarify a little more on what you mean I can give a more clear answer
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I mean when trying to outreach to client in the first place
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Gave feedback, Unfortunately I would suggest to rewrite the email into a Story or some form of Feel, Felt, And Found explanation. I would keep the copy for a landing page to explain the product in deeper detail but I wouldn't use it as an email.
Hope this helps!
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Thanks, I appreciate your suggestion
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Left notes in the google doc, A for effort but scrap it, there is no story and the email didn't grab any attention at all.
Hope this helps!
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Left some comments, Overall good copy! Have a few tweaks here and there but overall good 7/10. Keep up the Great Work! 🔥
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left my review, I would rewrite this and also study more copies in the dating space to see how they craft there emails. this one had no emotion and did not captivate me to want to click the link. A for effort but do more studying of the greats.
Hope this helps and don't forget to leave a like! 🔥
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Made some edits, overall good copy. 7/10 🔥
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Left Notes. A few things to change but this copy is WAAAAAAAAY better then your last piece of copy that you did. Definitely have to make a few tweaks still but it's still way better, Great Job! 6/10
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left notes, okay copy, needs some tweaking and you might have to rewrite the beginning. 5/10
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Copy is great, If possible I would find a way to get to the point quicker. it was engaging but I felt like I was reading on and on and on...
The actual copy is good though so keep up the great work! 8/10
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That's great to hear.
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Left some notes! Keep up the good work! 7/10
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Second copy ive written
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Okay brother, here is the truth, the hard truth, This reads like you didn't watch even 5 second of Tyson's 8 hour course. The grammar was not only incorrect everywhere but there were no spaces between the lines, It was hard to read, it didn't keep me engaged, This is not good work
Copywriting is not easy, it's not suppose to be. You need to study this!
don't worry about writing copy at all until you go through Tysons 8 hour Course TWICE!! Outreaching to clients will be pointless for you right now because even if you get a client you will lose them on your first email
Once you go through the course twice with notes. You will be well equipped to making good money, but if you don't study and don't put in the time to learn this, You will not win
Study hard and you will crush it. 1/10
Hope this helps
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wrote a few notes, Excellent Copy!!! kept me engaged made we want to watch the video it was talking about. It was short, sweet, and to the point!
9/10 Keep up the great work!
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hello Im a beginner and this is my first copy
I have two versions the first one being the copy I wrote myself and the second one being promt by AI. If you can review this I would appreciate it.
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WOW WOW WOW! Great copy, Spacing is good, easy to read, and engaging without being over the top.
With copy like this you are most likely already making money and if not, you definitely will 🔥
Only critiques I have is that It felt a little too long, and maybe have a better SL.
Other then that, Keep up the great work! 9/10
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Thank you brother.
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Spacing is good, Copy is good, It didn't feel like it took to long to get to the point. A very good soft sell email id say.
Just be careful of spelling errors. And also some lines I made more spacing between them to make it a tiny bit more readable.
Good work though! If you don't make money with this yet, you definitely will with work like this! 8/10
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YOU KNOW WHAT MAN I HAVE BEEN WAITING FOR THIS MOMENT WELL ITS JUST FOR PRACTISE LOL BUT WILL MAKE MONEY THANK YOU SO MUCH I WANNA ADD YOU ON IG IF YOU DONT MIND
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OUTSTANDING WORK MY FRIEND! You went from having some of the worst copy ever to creating a really good piece. It was engaging in the beginning and towards the end it made me really want to see what FLEX SPACE is really all about
Made a few small edits, and moved A line of the copy a little further down the email for smoothness in story transition
Keep up the great work! 8/10
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your guidance took a great part of my improvement, I hope you will keep guiding me
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Definitely felt salezy. the spacing is good but its the only thing good about it. I'd suggest going through Tysons 8 hour course again 2/10
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Email is good! The copy is good! Made a few edits for readability purposes and made a suggestion about deleting some of the fluff.
keep up the good work! 7/10
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Cool, thanks
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Hii everyone.
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Hey man, left some comments that might help you
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Man, I read your copy and it needs some improvements, so I left some comments that might help you on that
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Keep up the good work guys
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ive been copywriting almost 1 year and i quit and start my personal brand and again im back so rate it 0/10 and review it https://docs.google.com/document/d/1YR2XrpF5zxikjHc5Jh3oYGlOdHBtiAyT66ILEFblf04/edit?usp=sharing
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What’s good y’all this is what I can up so far let me know what you think https://docs.google.com/document/d/180osLPciSWnV690HuidA16ZKxj5HTe4HsXy1pYLtDwo/edit
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HEY ,SHAWN I WANTED A SPECIFIED REVIEW ON HOW THIS COULD BE THE BEST EMAILS POINT OUT WHAT CAN BE IMPROVED AND HOW ..... THANKS FOR CHECKING IT https://docs.google.com/document/d/1qJDIklwlYvIZXTnsQc2nFl46xlTA-qx9Caj8vUTAiyo/edit?usp=sharing
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Yo, these are some of my copies, and appreciate it for the review
And the numbers are the total number of copies I have made so far, I just took a big pile of them that I am thinking of adding to a portfolio in case they are good enough
Fyi it's a real Business
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I would greatly appreciate some feedback and advice!
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hello Im a beginner and this is my first copy
I have two versions the first one being the copy I wrote myself and the second one being promt by AI. If you can review this I would appreciate it.
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this is my very first time writing a sales page copy . I still don't know too much about it and i need ur feedbacks to know what i should fix and what i should focus on
waiting for your reviews 🙏🏼
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Let me know what I did right
Let me know areas I can improve on
Suggestions for WIIFM and Better SL would be appreciated 🙃
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Let me know what I did right
Let me know areas I can improve on
Suggestions for WIIFM and Better SL would be appreciated 🙃
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Yo Guys,
Wish to Review something that's not Email.
Well Below is your chance.
Give your best critique and tell where did this thing was the awesome and the lacky
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Document4.docx Rate from 1-10 and how can i improve it?
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Hi try to write the copy in google docs and share the link. It will be easier for us to review it there and comment on it.
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Any suggestions for improvement or edits, please feel free to share. I’d really appreciate your honest thoughts and any specific changes you think would make it better.
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Damn. what a hook
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hey check it out and let me know what do you think appreciate you guys https://docs.google.com/document/d/1JeQEN5M3z5UvwzJFIqSdEnVOY8vZbvPvQGdhQq33w7Y/edit?tab=t.0
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check this one out and let me know what do you think appreciate you guys
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A sales email on fitness coaching. Can someone please give an honest review. https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Kx7puQYr6XtqcHTd_fLiV1TwOOC4EHA14sZWcLtuRow/edit?usp=sharing
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check this out let me know what do you think appreciate you guys https://docs.google.com/document/d/1NH_rJfV7WbZv6zRE1V8QCMglqJkOpefcscWFLZMG8rw/edit?tab=t.0
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