Made edits. The copy in this email is pretty good! the second half of the email needed very little edits and was engaging.
the first part of the email needs more emotion in it. it feels like it went from your frustrated to heres how I can help. I made edits to show what I mean.
but overall good stuff! keep up the good work! 6.5/10
Have you ever done the bait and switch perfectly for you client that result in success, i would like to learn more about how you do it, perhap maybe I will DM you for it, I just wanna know first Thanks
Do you mean from a clickbait standpoint for emails? A sales standpoint for booking a sales call? If you can clarify a little more on what you mean I can give a more clear answer
Gave feedback, Unfortunately I would suggest to rewrite the email into a Story or some form of Feel, Felt, And Found explanation. I would keep the copy for a landing page to explain the product in deeper detail but I wouldn't use it as an email.
left my review, I would rewrite this and also study more copies in the dating space to see how they craft there emails. this one had no emotion and did not captivate me to want to click the link. A for effort but do more studying of the greats.
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Left Notes. A few things to change but this copy is WAAAAAAAAY better then your last piece of copy that you did. Definitely have to make a few tweaks still but it's still way better, Great Job! 6/10
Okay brother, here is the truth, the hard truth, This reads like you didn't watch even 5 second of Tyson's 8 hour course. The grammar was not only incorrect everywhere but there were no spaces between the lines, It was hard to read, it didn't keep me engaged, This is not good work
Copywriting is not easy, it's not suppose to be. You need to study this!
don't worry about writing copy at all until you go through Tysons 8 hour Course TWICE!! Outreaching to clients will be pointless for you right now because even if you get a client you will lose them on your first email
Once you go through the course twice with notes. You will be well equipped to making good money, but if you don't study and don't put in the time to learn this, You will not win
YOU KNOW WHAT MAN I HAVE BEEN WAITING FOR THIS MOMENT WELL ITS JUST FOR PRACTISE LOL BUT WILL MAKE MONEY THANK YOU SO MUCH I WANNA ADD YOU ON IG IF YOU DONT MIND
OUTSTANDING WORK MY FRIEND! You went from having some of the worst copy ever to creating a really good piece. It was engaging in the beginning and towards the end it made me really want to see what FLEX SPACE is really all about
Made a few small edits, and moved A line of the copy a little further down the email for smoothness in story transition
Yo, these are some of my copies, and appreciate it for the review
And the numbers are the total number of copies I have made so far, I just took a big pile of them that I am thinking of adding to a portfolio in case they are good enough
this is my very first time writing a sales page copy . I still don't know too much about it and i need ur feedbacks to know what i should fix and what i should focus on
Any suggestions for improvement or edits, please feel free to share. I’d really appreciate your honest thoughts and any specific changes you think would make it better.
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