Unique value email. But the only problem would be if they did not know about wolf of wall street. You need to add WIIFM. Left some notes. Keep working.
Change the SL. Mention the WIIFM Faster. And the email is confusing, write short, straight to the point and simple. It doesn't have flow at the start. Be more relatable, talk about fears and dreams state.
Email was confusing, talked about solving problems and not selling than switched to talking about mentors. Those are different topics. There are some notes left 4/10
Well, ill be honest need to improve 1000x more, the email was way too confusing, it was hard for me to read through it. In total i didnt get the email at all. Left some notes
Its a bit too long email. you could make like 2-3 other emails with given info in this one. But i like how simple you are, there is no confusion. Mby touch more on readers fears, pains and dream state. I would use this email as just a value email to warm up the lead and not a promo email. In total just write shorter. And be more realtable and engaging.
Lot of things to be improved. Work on your story telling skills. Dont repeate the same word over and over, dont use useles words. And make some sentences better sounding, left some notes. In total better then other email you have sent me
Lot to be improved. Improve your story telling. Learn about spacing and devide your big chunks of text into individual lines. Work on that for now and then send another email. Keep workin!
5/10 not bad at all, Add WIIFM. Make sentences a bit shorter and better sounding. Add some wittiness. Put the things that are incuded in the program in bullets.
Iam a new copywriter and just joined. I did mine on Samuel Onuha as i was subscribed to him for a while and i got an email from him so I decided to try write one and email him.
I am still in the proces of putting it on google docs so I will send soon. I have also liked everyone who is level 1 so they can be able to post their own copies sooner and get better feeback. Good luck all!
Good try, Try to use HSO email template and use examples there. Watch some videos too. Your story wasnt astory it was just telling, saying. Be more engaging and fun. Keep working, left some notes on the email.