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Email in supplement niche:
Honestly, any feedback and all the tips you got would be greatly appreciated as this is my first piece of copy ever.
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Hi Caden, I left some notes for you. Watch more of Tyson's email copywriting. Other than that, Make sure to keep up the grind 😁
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Niche: Health & Fitness
This is my 3rd email for the welcome sequence. Kindly review it and rate it out of 10.
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• 13d
reviewed it, check the suggestions. 8.5/10
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Unique value email. But the only problem would be if they did not know about wolf of wall street. You need to add WIIFM. Left some notes. Keep working.
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LEAVE A SOLID REVIEW NOT ANY YAPPING! FIND ME REAL MISTAKES AND IM NOT A BEGGINER ! EVEN THOUGH MY FIRST MAIL OF 2025 RESPECT FOR THE GUY CHECKING MY MAIL LEAVE 1/10 REVIEW AND ALSO PUT COMMENTS IN https://docs.google.com/document/d/1pqzljJypcAvPYNBc6KkaSRNklFX0wcXCxkZucKhJL4c/edit?usp=sharing
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Confusing email and it didnt have any flow, Write simple, Left some notes. Keep working!
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I AM CONFUSED HALF PEOPLE REALLY LIKE LEVEL 7 PEOPLE ALSO GAVE IT 6 AND OTHER HALF SAID THESE CHANGE
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There are some notes already left
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Done, left some notes. Kewp working man!
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Done, left some notes on your email
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Left some notes. In total just improve story telling skill. Not bad in total. Keep working.
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thank you
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Change the SL. Mention the WIIFM Faster. And the email is confusing, write short, straight to the point and simple. It doesn't have flow at the start. Be more relatable, talk about fears and dreams state.
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Please check it out.
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• 13d
Hey there!
2 email copies in the Life coaching niche!
Rating please ?/10
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• 13d
Good morning bruh!
3 email copies in the relationship niche!
Rating please ?/10
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Yo can anyone tell me how to allow people to make comments on google docs
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Click on the share button in your doc (its at the top right)
Then click on 'restricted' and set it to 'anyone with the link'
Now you would see another button appear in the same section as 'viewer'.
Click on it and set it to 'commenter' and then copy the link.
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Hi, I left some notes
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• 13d
reviewed it
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Appreciated, on a 1-10 scale, what would you rate?
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Not bad email. Like 6 or 7, add WIIFM and run it through chat got and tell it to make some sentences better sounding. Talk about the dream state.
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I dont have access
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You can check now
Have reset the setting
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Education niche.
Check this out. Be as harsh as possible. Want to improve.
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I would appreciate an honest feedback on my work. Thank you in advance.
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• 17d
Open to all Suggestions
Let me know what I did right
Let me know which areas I can improve on
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i dont have access to comment
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• 17d (edited)
Welcome email for people that signed up for free recourse (would appreciate if you suggest a PV lol)
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watch some videos on welcome email and try agian, left some notes
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The email is too confusing, work on being simple. ANd focus on writing about the readers dream state and fears, pains.
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left some feedback, definitely confusing, a little too salesy and was left wondering what I was being sold. Hope this helps!
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Email copy in health business niche https://docs.google.com/document/d/1h8kPmISYSfWxlre6HiCWzaY0G-kgehw33KSzkYlmIPc/edit?tab=t.0 Be as harsh as you want, I'm here to improve. Please also leave a rough rating, thank you!
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The email was too confusing, i would give it 4 or 5 out of 10, left some notes
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Email was confusing, talked about solving problems and not selling than switched to talking about mentors. Those are different topics. There are some notes left 4/10
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• 16d
should be done now
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Not bad, left some notes. I would recommend you talk about readers dream state. And mby change the SL it dosent fully go with your text. 4/10
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Work on creating problem solution loop, i didnt see one in your email. Left some notes. But i liked the ending it was nice.
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I dont have access to comment
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fixed please check it now
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• 16d
Yo,
I corrected my old old times email that somehow was....
Well the copy now isx1000 better.
So, give a brutal review to add x1.5
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Well, ill be honest need to improve 1000x more, the email was way too confusing, it was hard for me to read through it. In total i didnt get the email at all. Left some notes
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• 4d
Noted. I will be back with the same but 1000x better copy.
Be ready to give it a Brutal Critique.
Thanks Man
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• 16d
Yo, just rewrite this email, tell me this still like piece of shit or already good
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Not that bad, but watch some videos on welcome emails, you need some tweaks.
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• 16d
okey thanks bro
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Need to improve. Email is not engaging or interesting, it is just boring with bad flow. There are some notes left
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• 16d
Want a detailed review on this so I can improve it by pointing out which points and where the flow is weak.
Structure: Problem-Solution-Call-to-Action (PSA)
Promotional Email with a Soft Sell Approach in an Sequence
Fitness niche
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Its a bit too long email. you could make like 2-3 other emails with given info in this one. But i like how simple you are, there is no confusion. Mby touch more on readers fears, pains and dream state. I would use this email as just a value email to warm up the lead and not a promo email. In total just write shorter. And be more realtable and engaging.
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• 16d
Thank you for the detailed review
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The email is BAD. Lot to be improved. Left some notes. Keep working!
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if you want something more detailed then tell me
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Lot of things to be improved. Work on your story telling skills. Dont repeate the same word over and over, dont use useles words. And make some sentences better sounding, left some notes. In total better then other email you have sent me
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Thank you for your review. I believe that with your comments, I will be able to improve.
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Hey guys,
How's it going...
well I need you guys to help me with something.
I wrote a few out reach emails but I am not able to come up with SL for the emails
maybe you guys can help me and also let me know how can I improve in my emails
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Sorry but i dont review outreach yet
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Left some notes. You use too much analogies. Keep working!
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Done, left some notes, not too bad. Keep working.
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Not bad, Left some notes on your email. Keep working man!
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Lot to be improved. Improve your story telling. Learn about spacing and devide your big chunks of text into individual lines. Work on that for now and then send another email. Keep workin!
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Done, left some notes. Keep working bro!
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Way too short and confusing. If this is a promo email, people wont buy. You need to learn more about promo emails.
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Not bad at all, Need some improvments. I left some notes on your email. Keep improving!
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Done, left some notes.
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Good email, left some notes.
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Not bad at all. Left some notes. Keep working bro!
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Really good email. Left some notes. Keep working
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They are two emails there.
On the email for the ecom store please give me suggestions about the angles and ways to improve it.
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Done, there are some notes left on your email.
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Both good email, Left some notes.
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• 15d
Yo Bro Can you review my copy about business coaching and rate it? and tell what i need to improve?
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I dont have access
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• 14d
check again, i forgot to change the access😂
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Left some notes on your email
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Good email, but mby a bit short for a story email. left some notes
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I appreciate you checking it out
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Mby add the dream state somewhere, in total good email. There are some notes left. Keep working!
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• 15d
Give me your harshest and best possible criticism, I'm a beginner and this is one of my first copy that I've written.
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Your email is a bit confusing, write it really simple, and engaging. Left some notes. Good job!
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I appreciate it
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Thank you so much
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5/10 not bad at all, Add WIIFM. Make sentences a bit shorter and better sounding. Add some wittiness. Put the things that are incuded in the program in bullets.
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Is it good enough for a portfolio or for sending into dm while outreaching?
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• 13d
Iam a new copywriter and just joined. I did mine on Samuel Onuha as i was subscribed to him for a while and i got an email from him so I decided to try write one and email him.
I am still in the proces of putting it on google docs so I will send soon. I have also liked everyone who is level 1 so they can be able to post their own copies sooner and get better feeback. Good luck all!
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Solid 4/10 there are parts to be improved.
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Not bad email 6/10 left some notes too. Keep up the work!
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5/10 there are some notes left. Keep up the work!
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Good try, Try to use HSO email template and use examples there. Watch some videos too. Your story wasnt astory it was just telling, saying. Be more engaging and fun. Keep working, left some notes on the email.
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• 12d
MY ECOM COPY https://docs.google.com/document/d/18l5Bjtg6rXoLx_nv3TLXrsCdaTw8a0cC-yHMTfwUZmg/edit?tab=t.0 also could you guys follow my insta @osim.uwa so when i start outreaching I dont look like a bot, ive got 2 post copyriting related so you know im not just asking just for followers oh yeah its a new account aswell forgot to add
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Rewrite the email and try to use email copy templates
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Start with shoretning the text and learning about sapcing.
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• 11d
thanks gee
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Good value email, try to leave out usless words. Left some notes on the copy solid 6 or 7/10
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• 10d
A few promo emails I wrote as practice. Hit me with some pointers and a rating out of 10 🔥.
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• 10d
give access
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I would greatly appreciate some feedback and advice!
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• 9d
Hey, can you help me review this copy and tell me how to improve this shit
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make this PW "You will be consistent again!" more intriguing like "here's secret pill"
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5/10 left some notes
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4 or 5/10 left some notes. Liked it but needs to be improved
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A sales email on fitness coaching. Can someone please give an honest review and rate it out of 10?https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Kx7puQYr6XtqcHTd_fLiV1TwOOC4EHA14sZWcLtuRow/edit?usp=sharing
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